Friday, January 9, 2009

cellphone

opens, lights and
talks buzzing
wires everywhere
birds nest USA
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2 comments:

  1. Maurice BurfordJanuary 10, 2009 at 11:49 AM

    this is your best "imagist" poem. I think the other two either posses a clear sight or intellect, or sound (Phanopoeia, Melopoeia, Logopoeia) but they don't combine them all. And thus are lacking in that certain "magic" that makes a poem, a POEM.

    This one on the hand seems to put it all together nicely. It brings forth an image and certain sounds that call for kind of emotional, intellectual response.

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  2. IssaJanuary 12, 2009 at 9:57 PM

    Good -- the kind of feedback i was looking for in this endeavor

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